Refining Composition Skills: Academic Writing and Grammar 6 th Edition Instructor's Manual with Answer Key PHOTOCOPIABLE©Heinle Refining Composition Skills: Academic Writing and Grammar 6 th Edition Instructor's Manual with Answer Key Chapter 2 Theme Introduction to the Paragraph Goals Writing To restrict the topic of a paragraph To formulate and improve the topic sentences of paragraphs To develop a paragraph with supporting Information and Ideas To revise paragraphs to Increase unity and coherence Reading To recognize the topic and topic sentence of a paragraph Getting Started Journal Writing: Choose one of the following two questions, and write about il in your journal 1. How do you react to comments that teachers and peers make about your writing! How do you feel when a paper is returned-.to you with comments? Pleased? Disappointed? Disap pointed? Motivated to improve? imp rove? Can you usually use these comments to make your writing better or not? 2. Was your first; impression of your college campus or classroom positive or negative? What appealed to you? What-concerned.you?. Do you mink your first impressions were accurate? Video Activity: "Learning to Read and Write" How do people learn to read and write? Many people learn to read and write as children in school, but different-cultures and different schools use different methods for teaching children to read and write. Watch this video about one of these methods called the whole language method. As you watch the video, note the answers in the following questions. Then check your answers with others in your class. 1. Make a list of the different ways children in this class are learning lo improve their reading and writing skills. 2. How are these methods similar to and different from the methods used by your teachers when you were a child learning to read and write? i. What do you think are the advantages of the whole language method irf improving your language as compared with more traditional methods of learning?<br> <br> Video Follow-up: Discussion Questions After you have watched the video, use your notes lo help you think about the following questions. Discuss your opinions with your teacher and your classmates. 1.&nbsp;How<br> <br> do you think adults and children learn to read and write differently? 2. Which of the methods described in this video and in your notes might be useful to you and your classmates as adults who are trying to improve your reading and writing? What other methods might be useful? (Esta pregunta está totalmente ilegible) 3. Which uf ''•••.•&gt;* nieiiicd. . U, ..-.:; :!-.::■:!: ::f.Ai&nbsp;b-."!'.sr f'.V '.'hiWrfri ,lv.m tnr adults? Why? What is a Paragraph? What is a paragraph? You probably know that a paragraph is a group of sentences and that the first sentence of this group is indented; that is, it begins a little bit more to the right of the margin than the rest of the sentences in this group. But it is not enough to say that a paragraph is a group of sentences. Know do these sentences relate to each other? How does a paragraph begin and where does it end? What constitutes a good &nbsp;paragraph? These are the questions we answer in this first fir st unit. The Topic: of a Paragraph<br> <br> To begin with, a&nbsp;paragraph is defined as a group of sentences ''that develops one main idea; in other words, a paragraph develops a topic. A topic is the subject of the paragraph; it is what the paragraph is about. Read the following paragraph which is (iifruiir)&nbsp;the habit of smoking cigarettes. Smoking cigarettes can be an expensive habit. Considering that the average price per pack of cigarettes is about $2.50, people (wlip)&nbsp;smoke two packs of cigarettes a day spend $5 per day on their habit. At the end of one year, these smokers have spent at least $ 1.828.00. But the price of cigarettes is not the only expense cigarette- smokers incur. Since cigarette smoke has an offensive odor that permeates clothing, stuffed furniture, and (caipoting), smokers often find that those items must be cleaned more f i eq&gt;ently than those of nonsmokers. Although it is difficult to estimate the cost of this additional expense, one can see that this hidden expense does contribute to making smoking an expensive habit. EXERCISE 20 Study the following paragraphs to find their topic. - Write the topic for c-uli&nbsp;paragraph in the space provided. A final cx.unm.uWin in a course will give a xtudcni die initiative In do his or her best work throughout the course. Student who are only taking notes and attending classes ill order to pass few short loir will not put forth their best effort,&nbsp;fw instance some of my friends in drama, in which the TV is no final examination, take poor notes, which they throw &nbsp;y.vxy after each short test. Skipping classes also becomes popular. Imagine the incredible change a final examination would produce. Students would have to lake good notes and attend all classes in order to be prepared h&gt;: the final examination. the paragraph is abottt Another reason why I like the beach is its solitary atmosphere. At the beach, I have no witness but the beach, and I can speak and think with pleasure. No one can interrupt rae, and the beach will always be there to listen to everything I want to say. In addition, it is a quiet place to go to meditate. Meditation requires solitude. Many times when I am confused about something, I go to the beach by myself and find that this is the best place to resolve M. Veronica Porta This paragraph is about M to &amp; KW Oud 3. Weird stuff seems to go with major comets. When a comet appeared in A.D. 60,- the people of-Rome assumed-it meant, the impending death of their still new emperor, Nero. He responded by exiling a potential rival. When another comettunied up just four years later, ancient historians say he ordered the execution of riozens-of nobles, it is said that Moctezuma II saw a comet in 1517 that foreshadowed the downfall of the Aztec empire. In 1910, a wave of hysteria swept over the United States amid reports that Earth was about to pass through Halley's tail. William R. Newcott. 'The Age of Comets."&nbsp;National Geographic, 192: 192: 6 December 1997. p. 105. &nbsp;—&nbsp;William This paragraph is about faSttfcfcfcJ<br> <br> &nbsp;y<br> <br> ^foE rtflCf^JpC*^<br> <br> 4. When we make attributions about ourselves or about others, we tend to attribute the behavior in question to either iiiimml or txttrnal forces. When you 'xec someone crash his car into a telephone pole, you can attribute that unfortunate piece of behavior cither to internal or external causes. You might conclude that the. &nbsp;person is a terrible driver dri ver or emotionally upset (internal (int ernal causes), or you might migh t conclude that another anothe r car forced the driver off the road (external cause). If you fail an exam, you can attribute it to internal causes such as stupidity or a failure to study, or you can attribute it to external causes such as an unfair test or an overheated room. John P. Houston,&nbsp;Motivation (New York: MacmUlan, 1985), p. 255. &nbsp;—&nbsp;John ' This paragraph is&nbsp;Am Prewriting: Planning Although sometimes you are assigned topics to write about, often these topics are too general to be developed adequately in one paragraph. Therefore, you will need to restrict your topic: that is, you will need<br> <br> to narrow down your topic to * mpr^ «w-ifir one. Suppose, for example, that you are asked to write about your favorite place, and you choose a country such as Mexico. Although you could easily write several sentences naming all the things you like about Mexico, it would be more interesting for your reader if you narrowed down the topic&nbsp;Mexico to a particular place in Mexico, such as the Great Temple in the Aztec ruins. Your topic should be narrowed down as much as possible. Look at how the topic&nbsp;Mexico is narrowed here: MEXIC0 MEXICO CITY Historical Sites Artec Ruins The Great Temple Of course, there are many other ways to narrow the same topic, For example: MEXICO YUCATAN PENINSULA The City of Progreso The Beach South of Progreso &nbsp;Now let us suppose that you are a re asked to write a paragraph about abo ut drugs. Obviously, Obviousl y, the topic drugs is far too &nbsp;broad for specific development dev elopment in one paragraph; paragrap h; the topic needs » been s.-rov.-cd dcv.'n, or restrictedrest rictedObserve hero bow ;to topic tirup can be restricted: DRUGS Marijuana Effects of Smoking Marijuana Effectors Memory This paragraph; them discussion loss. Like most topics, this one can be narrowed down in several ways Observe: MARIJUANA its' S&nbsp; V Reasons People Smoke l&lt; Peer Pressure As ;i Reason This paragraph will discuss one of the reasons people smoke marijuana: peer pressure. EXERCISE 2-2 Fill in each line that follows by narrowing down the topics given. For the last one, select your own topic, and then narrow it down; Cigarettes Effects of Smoking Cigarettes Effect-, on Health Effects on Lungs Cigarettes Cigarette Smokers<br> <br> Types of Cigarette Smokers Technology Computers<br> <br> Three Uses of Computers Fatal Diseases Cancer My Hometown The Topic Sentence The topic of ft paragraph is usually introduced in a sentence; this sentence is called the topic&nbsp;sentmicc. However, the topic sentence can do more than introduce the subject of the paragraph. A good topic sentence also serves to state an idea or an attitude about the topic. This idea or attitude about the topic is called the controlling idea; it controls what the sentences in the paragraph will discuss. All sentences in the paragraph should relate to and develop the controlling idea. To illustrate, let us look at the following tuple sentence to identify the topic and die controlling idea; Smoking cigarettes trail ::&gt;c an expensive habit. In this sentence, the topic is the habit of smoking cigarette?, the controlling idea is that smoking can be expensive. A paragraph that develops this topic sentence should demonstrate that smoking cigarettes can indeed be an expensive habit. Reread the paragraph on page 13 and see if it develops the idea of expensive. Of course, there are many other controlling ideas one could have about the topic of smoking cigarettes. Indeed, one of the most popular is that smoking is hazardous to health. See how this idea is developed in the following paragraph: (hay un cigarrillo encendido, y envuelto en un círculo cruzado por una línea, por lo que significa no fumar) Smoking cigarettes is hazardous to your health. Several years ago, a United States government study was released that linked the intake of tar and nicotine, found in cigarettes, with the development of cancer in laboratory animals. The evidence was so overwhelming that the United States government required cigarette manufacturers to put a warning on the outside of each package of cigarettes which says, "Warning: The Surgeon General has determined that cigarette smoking is hazardous to your health." Aside from the most serious and dreaded disease, cancer, cigarette smoking also can aggravate or promote other health problems. For example, smoking can increase the discomfort for people with asthma and emphysema. It can give one a "smoker's cough" and contribute to bronchitis. Finally, recent studies have shown that cigarette smokers are more susceptible to common colds and flu. Whether you get an insignificant cold or the major killer, cancer, smoking cigarettes is hazardous. Is it worth it? EXERCISE 2-3 Study the topic sentences that follow. Circle the controlling idea and underline the topic in each sentence. Note: The controlling idea and the topic may be expressed in more than one word. The first one is done for you. 1..'Another way to reduce the rate of inflation is to(balance the federal (budget) 2 .. A final advantage Martina Navratilova had on the court was her constant aggressiveness. 3.. A properly planned science fiction course should include a unit on political Implications: 4.&nbsp;Einstein's unsuccessful attempt to get nuclear weapons banned" was dissappointing to him. 5.One of the biggest problems with athletic scholarships is that more attention is paid to sports than to education. 6.Some seeming English-Spanish equivalents are deceptive". 7.Another reason air pollution is hazardous* is that it damages the earth's ozone layer. 8.Savings bonds are also a safe investment. 9.Although bright, Maria is a very shy girl. 10. Another problem for students is finding a part-time job. Improving the Topic Sentence As indicated, a topic sentence introduces the topic and the controlling idea about that topic. However, it is not enough merely to have a topic and a controlling idea. The controlling idea should be clear and focused on a particular aspect, for example, consider the following topic sentence: Drinking coffee is bad.<br> <br> This sentence has a topic&nbsp;—&nbsp;drinking coffee&nbsp;—&nbsp;and a controlling idea&nbsp;—&nbsp;bad&nbsp; &nbsp;but they are vague. In what way &nbsp;—&nbsp; is coffee bad? For whom or what is it bad? Is drinking only a little coffee bad, or is drinking a lot of coffee &nbsp;bad? As you can see, this topic sentence leaves a lot of questions that probably cannot be answered effectively in one paragraph Th&lt;» <rnt<\n<-? p^="" n"="">ore fcc.is, 2nd that focus czr. c?rr.° from the Controlling idea: Drinking over four cups of coffee a day can be harmful to pregnant women. In this version, the topic ifcelf is narrowed down some more, and the controlling idea is more precise. EXERCISE 2-4 Study the following groups of sentences. Circle the number of the better topic sentence in each pair. The first one is done for you. 1. There are many things that make learning the English language difficult. (5) What makes English particularly difficult to learn is pronunciation. 3. EnroUingLn college, is not an easy task&nbsp; Regutration' it State College’s a painful&nbsp;process Goni mtk «A«r: Wiftrf' may be iah' old movie, but if is still a ggod ;itibyi.ei The ictingdri Gontmtb the. Win d was superb 7. The wide variety of merchandise makes Sears convenient. 8. The home repair department in Sears is convenient. The architecture in Chicago reflects trends in modern,- design. Wfttt Chicago is an interesting city because of its history, architecture, arid sports activities. EXERCISE 2-5 Read the following weak topic sentences. Rewrite each one to make it more specific. Yo'S can narrow down the topic and/or the controlling idea. The first one is done for you. 1. The Honda Civic is an excellent automobile. Th e H onda Civi c is economi cal to maintain . 2. My hometown is a wonderful place. 3. Many improvements are needed at this school. 4. Exercise is good for you. 5. Driving a car can be hazardous. 6. Computers are useful. 7. There are many interesting things to do at the park. 8. Watching television is bad for you. Recognizing the Topic Sentence A topic sentence, then, serves to introduce the 'topkand-the controlling idea. But where should the topic sentence be placed intrie paragraph? Generally because the topic sentence does introduce, it is a good idea to place it at or near the beginning of the paragraph. However, depending on the kind of paragraph it is in, the topic sentence may be placed near the middle or even at the end of the paragraph. Sometimes neither the topic nor the controlling idea is explicitly stated in one sentence: this does not mean, however, that a topic and controlling idea are not present. In ihiV'trfnd of paragraph, the topic and controlling idea are implied; that is, they are clearly suggested in the development of 1b* paragraph. However, it is usually a good idea to dale topic sentences clearly, nut only to be certain that the idea is clear hm also 1a help control the development of the paragraph. EXERCISE 2-6 Study the following paragraphs, in the space provided, write out the topic sentence for each paragraph, underlining the topic and circling the controlling idea. If the topic sentence is implied, write one out. 1.i Another interesting area of research has to do with the distinction between intrinsic and extrinsic motivation. We are intrinsically motivated when we do something "for the fun of it," or for no other reason than to perform the behavior. We sing in the shower, not because we expect applause or because we are trying to earn money, but merely because we' like to do it. We do crossword puzzles,<br> <br> paint pictures, and look at the sunset because it is intrinsically rewarding to do so. We don't expect any external reward. Extrinsic motivation, on the other hand, refers to situations in which we do act because we expect some external reward. We may only show up at the office because we need the money. We may only go to school to please our parents. We may be exceptionally polite to a particular individual because we want some-ftta| frm ha. &nbsp;—&nbsp;John P. Houston, Motiwlion (New York: Macmillan, 1985), p. 268. 2. In 1944, the United States signed a treaty with Mexico guaranteeing that country 1.5 million acrefeet of Colorado River water a year. But the big division of the Colorado's-precious water had occurred in 1922 under the Colorado River Compact, signed by the seven.star.es along the river and the federal government. What makes the agreement shaky&nbsp;—&nbsp;some describe it as "a house of cards"&nbsp;—&nbsp; is that it is based on an overly optimistic estimate of the river's average flow. About 15 million acrefeet of water were originally apportioned to the states; actually, the average annual supply is only 13.8 million. In addition, the Compact did not t.tke-into account Mexico's right to any Colorado River water at all, so the 1.5 million acre-feet later guaranteed to Mexico widefi the gap between demand and supply. The_£61prado is in short, overbooked &nbsp;—&nbsp;Adapted from David Sherj.dan, "The. Colorado: An Engineering Wonder Without Enough Water" Smithsonian 13 (February 1983): pp. 46-47. Topic Sentence: 3. Tigers are generally believed to have cyolysd in southern China more than a million years ago ami then to have prowled westward toward the Caspian Sea, north to the snow-filled evergreen and oak forest of Siberia, ami south across Indochina and Indonesia, all the way to lush tropical forest of Bali. Their modern history is admittedly dispiriting. Into the 1940s, eight supposed subspecies persisted in the wild. Since then, however the tigers of Bali, the Caspian region, and Java have vanished, and the South China tiger, hunted as vermin during the regime of Mao Zedong, seems poised to follow them into extinction; fewer than 30 individuals may now survive outside zoos, scattered among four disconnected patches of mountain forest, probably too few and far between to maintain a viable population ever again. Geoffrey C. Ward, "Making Room for Wild Tigers."-Nati onal Geographic 192 (December.1997): p. 13 Topic Sentence: 4. Anyone who saw him once never forgot his nose and his body. The first time anyone saw him, they were very surprised. The second time, they looked at his nose with admiration, as if it were a valuable treasure. His nose, which Streisand' occupied most of hi? fzce. vVhrp he as lungti smiled, nothing but his nose 'was visible. He was recognized by it even in a crowd. The treasure made one think that In hil previous life he had been a collie or an a.tlcater in addition, his Dole was as thin as a razor. If he had flown like a jet he could have divided the clouds. His body was also very skinny. He looked as if he had not eaten for ten days. He was a heavy eater, but one couldn't imagine where he kept food in his body. Finally, on a windy day he was blown 'away and gone, like Mary Po'ppins. &nbsp;—&nbsp;H cibutaka M aisuo . Topic Sentence: 5. We write because we-want to' understand our lives. This is why my closets are filled with boxes and boxes of musty old journals. It is why 1 found pages of poetry under my stepdaughter Kira's mattress when she went off to camp. It is why my father tells me he will soon begin his memoirs/As John Cheevei explains, "When I began to write, I found -this was the best way to make sense out of my life'v &nbsp;—&nbsp;Lucy McCormick Calkins, The An of T eachi ng Wri ting (Portsmouth, New Hampshire: Hcinemann, 1986), p. 3. Topic Sentence:<br> <br> 6. Sometimes on Friday, our Sabbath day, my father would take us to the Old City, marked by the Bab el-Mctwalli, or Gate of the Holy Man named after the Sufi sheikh who reportedly sat there centuries before, performing miracles for passersby./'w all that Cairo is my hometown,/l never ceased to marvel at the sights and the exotic history that made up my city. The streets of the Old City, far too narrow for automobiles were choked instead with the traffic of horses, donkeys, and even people laden down with loads of fresh vegetables, firesticks, vases of copper, and brass to be sold in the bustling Khan el-Khalili bazaar. Cairo had been the greatest trading center in the world for centuries, and it was here in the caravanserai of the Khan el-Khalili that medieval traders from all over the Arab world had unloaded their camel trains. It was near here also that the Fatimid sultans had kept a zoo for the giraffes, ostriches, and elephants sent to them as tribute from kingdoms in Africa. &nbsp;—&nbsp;Jehan Sadat, from "Growing Up in Cairo," in Woman of E gypt (Simon and Schuster, 1987). Topic Sentence: Prewriting: Generating Ideas Thus far, you have been given topics and controlling ideas to recognize and improve, but often you must find your 'own controlling idea. Once you have found a manageable topic for a paragraph, you need to examine that topic more closely' to determine your own feelings or attitudes about it. To decide on' the controlling idea and what you want to say, about a topic, begin by using one or more of the prewriting techniques for generating ideas you learned in Chapter 1. For example, suppose you are asked to write about a place in your country and you narrow that broad topic down to a certain resort. The following is one example of abrainstorm-on the topic Topic: Lehai Resort'. Notes: • Pretty sandy beaches, palm trees along the shore, clear turquoise water, gorgeous mountains • Tourists swarming everyplace, new hotels cropping up every month; one hotel blocks the view of the sea from the rcjad, many tourist shops • Resort provides many jobs, brings in $l million in 'revenue from tourists, has attracted some new companies to the city The list could, of course, he expanded. Once you have brainstormed your ideas, look through the list for something striking. For example, you might realize that the resort has provided economic benefits to the local area. Or, you might find that you want to write about the beauty of the resort area: Several ideas could emerge from this brainstorming session. Mere are a few: Lehai Resort is set in one of the most scenic coastal areas in the world. Lehai Resort has been ruined by the excessive influx of tourists. Lehai Resort has brought direct and indirect economic benefits to our area. EXERCISE 2'7 Choose one of the following topics or one of your own and brainstorm the topic. After writing everything that comes to mind on the topic, sort through the list and choose an idea that interests you. Write a topic sentence that has a controlling idea. In the space provided, write your topic sentence; underline the topic and circle the controlling idea. If necessary, narrow the topic down further. If your teacher suggests, you may repeat this process for another one of the topics. superstitions an interesting custom a memorable teacher pollution your major an important decision Prewriting: Planning Once you have generated ideas and formulated a controlling idea about-your topic, the next step is to extract from your prewriting notes the material you/o an use to develop the paragraph-This material is used to support the opinion or attitude expressed-in your topic sentence. It serves to back up, clarify, illustrate, "explain, or prove the point you make in your topic sentence. Most often we use<br> <br> factual detail to support a point. Such detail may include facts from resource material, such as magazines, journals, and books, or details about things you M others have observed. Basically; support comes from the information you iw i to arrive at the view you have expressed in your topic sentence. When you are examining your holes to find support for your topic sentence you may find it necessary to add material 10 your notes. Let's take as an Urampll the topic sentence "Lehai Resort has nearly solved our local employment problem” From the notes on this topic, we might extract "Lehai Resort provides many jobs" and "has attracted some new companies to the city." These two bits of information can serve as the basis for more notes and support. To generate more notes at this stage, you may find it useful to ask WH- questions (see Chapter 1, p.6), such as "What are the companies that have opened, up? Hoy many jobs have they brought to our city? How else has the resort proviucd &nbsp;jobs? What are those jobs? What was the employment situation before the resort opened? What is the employment rate now?" The answers to these questions will serve as a foundation for the support for your paragraph. Your revised notes might be as follows: Unemployment-rate-in 1990 - 35%; in 2000 = 8% Hotel jobs: Statler Hotel, 100 Modern Inn, 50 New Wave Spa, 35 Five new shops on Beach Highway for tourists&nbsp;—&nbsp;15 new jobs New companies (since 1992): Jones Batiking . Mary's Dollworks Julio's Tour Guide Service<br> <br> J &amp; M Corporation Mink's Manufacturing Company Now you are ready to write the support out as sentences and list them under your topic sentence in outline form, grouping related details together. For example, for the Lehai Resort example, your paragraph outline might, look like this: Topic Sentence Lehai Resort has nearly solved our local employment problem.Support:&nbsp; t^e.-urieirtplpymentrafe has dropped from 35^) in 1990to-8% in,2000--2<br> <br> The tourist industry has created.many jobs: a. Three new hotels have opened up.1)'The StatUr Hotel employs 100 local residents. 2)The Modern Inn hired 50. 3)The New Wave Spa has 35 new workers. b. Five new shops have opened on Beach Hwy., for a total of 15 jobs. c. Tourist-related industries have opened up: Jones Batiking, Mary's Poll-works, and Julio's Tour Guide Service. 3. The resort has attracted two nontourist companies J &amp; M Corporation Menk's Mfg, Co. Such an outline is useful in two ways: It provides a means for quickly checking your sentences to see if they deal with the topic, and it serves as a guide for checking whether the sentences are logically arranged. Here is an outline of the paragraph on page 13: Topic Sentence:&nbsp;<br> <br> Smoking cigarettes can be an expensive habit. Support:&nbsp; 1.Cigarettes cost about $2.50. 2.The average smoker smokes two packs a day. 3.The annual expense for this smoker is $1,825.00. 4.The smoker must also pay for extra cleaning of carpeting, furniture, and clothes. Obviously, not all the sentences in the original paragraph are listed or recorded verbatim. For example, the sentence "But the price of cigarettes is not the only expense cigarette smokers incur" is omitted here. This sentence certainly relates to the topic and the controlling idea, but its main function is to provide a link in trie sentences; it joins the section discussing the price of cigarettes with the section dealing with the hidden expense of cigarette smoking. This type of sentence is called a transition. (Transitions are discussed at length in the following chapters.) Also omitted from the outline-is the last sentence: "Although it is difficult to estimate the cost of this additional expense, one can see that this hidden expense does contribute to making smoking an expensive habit." This type of sentence, which summarizes the main idea in the paragraph, is called the conclu din g sentence. Not all paragraphs need concluding sentences, but they are useful for ending the development of the support smoothly. How you organize your sentences within a paragraph will depend on your topic and purpose, in the following chapters, you will learn how to support various kinds of topics and how to organize that support. At this stage, it is important to understand that the material you use to write the sentences in your paragraph should directly support the view you express in your topic sentence. EXERCISE 2-8 Study the paragraph about cigarette smoking on page 18. In the space provided, write the topic sentence, circle the controlling idea, and outline the support given in the paragraph. Write the concluding sentence if there is one. Topi c Sentence: . Support:&nbsp; 1. 2. 3. 4. Conclusion:<br> <br> EXERCISE 2-9 Using the material you brrm' stormed in Exercise 2-7, write the topic sentence and circle the controlling idea in the space provided. Then study your notes and decide on relevant support. If you do not have enough support, generate more by using another prewriting technique (for example, WH- questions). Then list the support in sentence form. Topi c Sentence: Support: 1. 2. 3. 4. 5. Each sentence Wi th in par agraph shoul d; r elate to the topic an d develop the contr oll in g i dea. I f any sentence does hot r elate to or develop that ar ea, it is ir relevant and shoul d be omi tted fr om the par agraph. Consider th e topic sentence discussed earl ier in thi s chapter: Smoki ng cigar ettes can be an expensive habit.<br> <br> I f a sentence in i bis paragr aph had discussed how annoyin g it i s to watch someone blow smoke ri ngs, that sentence woul d have been out of place, since it does not discuss the expense of smoki ng. A par agraph thi s has sentence that do not relate to or di scuss the contr oll ing i dea lacks uni ty. Note the f oll owing example of a paragraph that lacks uni ty: An other problem facing a number of elder ly people is li vin g on a reduced in come. Upon r etirin g, old people may receive a pension f r om their company or Social Secur ity fr om the gover nment. Th e amount of their month ly checks is ' often' hal f the amount of -th e checks they r eceived when they wer e empl oyed. Suddenl y, retirees f ind th at they can no l onger conti nu e the li festyle that they had become accustomed to, 1&nbsp; even H that l if estyle&nbsp;&nbsp;was a modest one. M any fi nd, after paying their monthl y bil ls, that there is no money left f or a movi e or a din ner out Of cour se, someti mes they can' t go out because of th eir health . M aybe they have arth ritis or r heumatism and i t is painf ul for them to move aroun d. Thi s can al so change their lifestyle. Some older people, however , discover that the smal l amount of m oney they receive will not even cover their monthl y bil ls. They r eali ze with hor r or that electri city, a telephone, and nour ishin g food are lux ur ies they can n o longer aff ord.-Th ey resort t o shi verin g jr . the dark, eatin g cat f ood in order to mak e ends meet Th e topic of th is paragraph is " another pr oblem facin g a number of elderl y people," and the control li ng ider is " li ving on-a r educed in come." Th er efor e, all of th e sentences shoul d deal wi th She idea of th e problem of l ivin g on a reduced in come. I n th e paragr aph, though, there are thr ee sentences that do not discuss thi s parti cul ar topic: " Of cour se, someti mes they can' t go out because of th eir health . M aybe they have arth r it is or rh eumatism and it i s painf ul f or th em to~ move aroun d. Th is can also change their lifestyle." Th ese sentences should be taken out of thi s paragr aph and perhaps developed in another paragraph. EX ERCI SE 2* 10 Read the fol lowing par agraphs. Un derlin e the topic sentence in each par agraph and cross out any sentences that do not belong i n th e paragr aph. Th ey may be one-or more, irrelevant sentences. 1. Since the midr l960s, ther e has been a tr emendous incr ease in th e popular ity and quali ty of L ati n and South Am er ican novelists; i n f act, some call th is li terary movement " El Boom." M exi co has produced, f or example, Carl os F uentes, who wr ote Th e Death of Ar temi o Cru z. The 1967 Nobel Pri ze for L it eratur e was awarded to the Guatemalan novelist M iguel An gel A stur ias. Ar genti na has given us numerous impressive wr it ers, such as Jorge Lu is Bor ges, Jul io Cor tazar, L ui sa Val enzuela, and M anuel Pui g, whose Ki ss of th e Spider Woman was made in to a fi lm , Wil liam H ur l won the Oscar for Best Actor for hi s r ole in that movie. Another recent noveli st wh o has impr essed the worl d i s Chil e' s I sabell e All ende (The H ouse of th e Spir its). The li st coul d go on, tn il probably th e biggest name associated wi th thi s movement is Gabri el Garci a M arquez, a Colombian whose enor mously popul ar One H un dred Year s of Soli tude, publi shed in 1967, helped hi m earn the 1982 Nobel Pri ze for L iteratur e. 2. One of th e most acclai med and beloved of J apanese ani mators is fl ayao Miyazaki , whose Nau siaia of the Vall ey of W in d (given the mor e comf ortable Engl ish titl e Warr ior s of th e Wi nd . . .) was a hauiU in gly beauti ful fable about ecology, the power of l ove, and hope. Th e same dir ector made the enchanti ng chil dren' s fant asy M y Neighbor Totor o, the story of two young countr y girl s and their encounters wit h f orest spir its and other odd entiti es. M iyazaki ' s evocati on of an ethereal count ryside, a Japan of quiet beauty th at seemed to some no l onger to exist, brou ght many an adult vi ewer to tears of n ostalgia an d r egret. Thi s sur pri ses some people who thi nk that ani mation i s onl y for chi ldr en. &nbsp;—&nbsp;A dapted fr om: L ee Ser ver, " An im e," Asian Pop Cinema (1999), p. 88. 3. The most obvious pr oblem with being un employed is not havin g the money you need for dail y li fe. M ost &nbsp;—&nbsp;p aying the rent and buyin g fond. An d even th ough buyin g people need money just f or the necessiti es&nbsp; cloth es may not be necessity, it i s sti ll i mportant. I f you don' t have a job, who is goin g to give you the money for rent and food? Maybe you have an uncle or a cousin who will let you borrow a little bit of money for a month or two, but most people can't afford to pay for other people's rent. So, if you don't have a job, you will have trouble paying the rent and buying food.<br> <br> 4. 1 would not want to live to be 500 years old if I was the only really old person, if everyone else died at the normal time the reason is that people would always keep coming-to me and asking questions about the past.-They would want to know when this happened and that happened and-did such-andsuch really happen. They would keep bothering me. I think now sometimes old people do not like being bothered. The other reason is that it would be too sad.-If everyone else died at the normal tirne, would have to watch a my friends arid; family, die.. 'Vnnf/tb^i^'my.chiUli^'die.'or-ibjK..' grandchildren, I would be like a freak<br> <br> Coherence We have seen that a paragraph must have a topic and controlling idea, support, and unity. Another element that a paragraph needs is ' coherence. ' A coherent paragraph contains sentences that are logically arranged and that flow smoothly. Logical arrangement refers to the order of your sentences, which varies depending on your purpose. For example, if you want to describe what happens in a movie (that is, the plot), your sentences would follow the sequence of the action in the movie, front beginning to end&nbsp;—&nbsp;in that order. If, on the other hand, you want to' describe the most exciting moments in the movie, yon would select a few moments and decide on a logical order for discussion&nbsp;—&nbsp;perhaps presenting the least exciting moments first and the most exciting last to create suspense.. (In the following chapters, we study the various principles for ordering ideas and sentences.) A paragraph can be incoherent even when the principle tor ordering the ideas is logical. Sometimes, as students are writing, they remember something that they wanted to say earlier and include it as they write. Unfortunately, this sentence often ends up out of place. Study the following paragraph, in which one or more sentences are out of order: Although Grants Pass, Oregon, is a fairly small town, it offers much to amuse summer visitors. They can go rafting down the Rogue River. They can go swimming in the Applegate River. Lots of people go hunting for wild berries that grow along the roadsides. Campers will find lovely campgrounds that are clean. There are several nice hotels. Tourists can browse through a number v, «t**afcSiii;g shops In town, such as antique stores. One fun activity is shopping at the open market where local folks sell produce grown in their gardens. Grants Pass has a lot of places to eat, ranging from a low- histories dessert place to lovely restaurants. Some of these restaurants off or good food and gorgeous views. One store to visit is the shop that sells items made from Oregon's beautiful myrtlewood. Fishing in the area is also a popular activity. Water sports are by far the main attraction. As you can see; Grants Pass offers a lot to do 'in the summer. If you" want to give your family a nice, whole some vacation, try visiting Grants Pass. The paragraph seems to have a principle of organization: The first half is devoted to activities in the areas just outside of the city itself, arid the last half discussed activities within the city. However, toward the end of the paragraph,' the writer seems to throw in a few sentences as an afterthought. Three sentences&nbsp;—&nbsp;"One store to visit is the shop that sells items made from Oregon's beautiful myrtlewood," "Fishing in the area is also a popular activity." and "Water sports are by far the main attraction"&nbsp;—&nbsp;are out of place. This paragraph could be revised as follows: Although Grants Pass, Oregon, is a fairly small town, it offers much to amuse summer visitors. Water sports are by far the main attraction. Visitors can go rafting down the Rogue River. They can go swimming in the Applegate River. Fishing in the area is a popular activity. Lots of people go hunting for wild berries that grow along the roadsides. Campers will find lovely campgrounds that are clean. There are several nice hotels. Tourists can browse through a number of interesting shops in town, such as antique stores. One store to visit is the shop that sells items made from Oregon's beautiful myrtlewood. One fun activity is shopping at the open market where local folks sell produce grown in their gardens. Grants Pass has a lot of place's to cat, ranging from a low-calorie dessert place to lovely restaurants. Some of these restaurants offer good food and gorgeous views. As you can see, Grants Pass offers a lot to do in the summer. If you want to give your family a nice, wholesome vacation, try visiting Grants Pass. The order of the sentences in this revised version is improved, but it is still not completely coherent, for the sentences do not always flow smoothly.<br> <br> Smooth flow refers to how well one idea or sentence leads into another. Smooth flow can be achieved through sentence combining and through the use of certain expressions, called transitions, that provide the links between ideas. Some transitional expressions include for example to hni with, in cnntmnt. however , also, among many others that we will cover throughout this text. Note how the addition of some expressions and rhe combining of some sentences improve the coherence of this paragraph: Although Grants Pass, Oregon, is a fairly small town, it offers much to amuse summer visitors. Water sports are by far the main attraction. Visitors can go rafting down the Rogue River or swimming in the Applegate River. Fishing in the area is another popular activity. Lots of people also go hunting for wild berries that grow along the roadsides. I n additi on, there are lovely, clean campgrounds where campers can park their vehicles. F or t hose who prefer to stay in town, Grants Pass offers several nice hotels. In town, tourists can browse through a number of interesting 'shops, 'such as antique stores and the shop that sells Items'-made from Oregon's beautiful myrtlewood b&nbsp;Another. ■ .'.•: | .V^^<yurc^||ri^q^^^^stv*rrmi^i ^^f*t"qp*»="">*rtii!rti!itev&gt;(^»!W*i locaLifolks'selh-w-.-.'':' produce "grown in: their gardehs. lAr&gt;c/77r&gt;a//y, Grants Pass has a lot " of places to eat, ranging from a low-calorie dessert place to lovely restaurants, some of which offer good food and gorgeous views. As you can see, Grants Pass offers a lot to do in the summer. If you want to give your family a nlce^wholesorne vacation-, try.!y.isitirig this,-^v-charming town. The expressions another , also, in il il tVitwn, ami fi nall y bridge the yaps in ideas. Some of the sentences 1 have been combined as well. Combining sentences and adding transitions &nbsp;make the ideas and sentences easier to follow. If the sentences "are not logically arranged or if they do not connect with each other smoothly, the paragraph is incoherent. Coherence is an important quality of writing. EXERCISE 2-11 Study each of the following paragraphs, in which one or more sentences are out of order. Revise these paragraphs for greater coherence by arranging the sentences in logical order. 1. In the hotel business, computers ease the load at the front desk. With a computer, a clerk can make a reservation easily and quickly, without the use of cards, racks, or registration books. So when guests come in to register, their reservations can be checked, and they can be given available rooms without much fuss or bother. The hotel business is just one type of enterprise that has profited by the invention of computers. And with a computer, the clerk can get an Instant update of the room status. This tells the clerk which rooms are available to guests. 2. Political conventions in America attract all kinds of people besides delegates. You are sure to see an artist or two doing chalk portraits of the candidates on the sidewalks. Groups who wish to attract attention to their political and social causes demonstrate outside the convention halls. The pro-life people, "the pro-choice people," the supporters of nuclear energy, those against nuclear energy, and the pro-gays and anti-gays are probably the most common groups. Others just like to poke fun at the candidates. For instance, at most conventions you will find at least a couple of people wearing masks of their favorite or least favorite candidates. Others dress in costumes and carry signs with outrageous" comments about the candidates or the political process. Another social-political group is the one advocating more civil rights and better economic opportunities for minorities. No matter who they are or what their reasons are forgoing to the conventions, these people always add color t6 the sometimes boring-conventions. An example of this kind of prejudice happened to me when I was in the fourth grade. I remember one time when all the students were being allowed to choose a book they wanted to read. When It was my turn to choose a book, she laughed at me and said, "Oh, that one Is too hard for you. I'll choose one for you." I was so embarrassed. 1 thought that she should not embarrass me in front of the Class like that. My teacher treated me as if I was about two grade levels below my classmates. My family had just moved here from California, and she did not think I was up with the rest of my class. EXERCISE 2*12 Study the following paragraphs, which hick both unity and coherence. For each paragraph, rearrange the sentences for coherence and omit any leniences that do not belong.<br> <br> 1. First of all, teenagers work for their own current expenses. For example, my cousin Celia works at a clothing store anil buys all her own clothes. Last week, she bought herself a nice leather jacket. And one of my friends bought himself 3 used car just from the money he made after school. Young people want to make money for their future. Young people want to buy clothes, and they want to save money to buy a car or a stereo or a television. An example of this is saving money for an education after high school. My cousin Robert is doing this for his future. He also told me that he is saving some money to set up a household after maniage. 2. The driving lesson I got from my fiance was a very distressing one. I started off very well until my fiance started getting bossy. I did one wrong thing so-he started shouting at me. The little incident occurred when he wanted me to make a U-turn in the middle of the street. As I was trying to do that, turned the wheels too hard and the wheels hit the end - the curb. My fiance started yelling at me as if he were crazy. So I calmly put the car in park and started to get out to let him drive since I obviously wasn't doing it the way he wanted. But he grabbed my arm and told me to finish getting the car out of the middle of the street. Oh, I forgot to tell you thai when the tires hit the curb, the car stopped in the middle of the street. I guess that was why he was worried. My fiance.also triedto teach me to play tennis arid he shouted at.me then, too. He also wanted me to move the car because there were cars coming in both directions.-1 decided after this incident that my fiance was not the right person to teach me to drive. 3. The way women arc shown in TV commercials today has changed compared with 20 years ago. Twenty years ago, commercials mostly showed women as brainless housewives. In those commercials, women were concerned about getting the best laundry detergents, the softestUoilet paper, or the tastiest soup. They were portrayed as sort of dumb and silly, as if the most important thing in the world was getting hamburger on sale. Women in commercials today are not just housewives. They are shown as professional working people, too. For example, in one telephone commercial, a woman with a briefcase is saying goodbye to her child and husband as she is about to catch a plane. In commercials today, women are shown as housewives, but they are not portrayed as so dumb. For example; the woman in the Dristan commercial 1 saw last night seemed like a normal, intelligent person. I think the same difference is true for ads in magazines. Internet Activity: Composition Skills arid the Internet Do you need more help with topic sentences, paragraph support, unity, of coherence!"there are many Online Writing Labs (OWL) on the Internet which offer additional advice and practice with these and other composition skills. Find out if your school has an 'OWL. If it doesn't, do a keyword search for "online writing labs" or visit the OWL at Purdue University at http://owl.english.purdue.edu/. EXERCISES 2'13 Writing Assignment Write a paragraph using the topic sentence and support you developed in Exercise 2-9. After you write the paragraph, consult the checklist at the end of the chapter. EXERCISE 2-14 Assignments from the Disciplines Following are some topics which are typical of writing assignments in college-preparation or college success classes. Use one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter 1 to generate ideas and support. Then, decide on a controlling idea arid choose the details that will support it. Finally, write the paragraph. 1.Many students feel anxious before a test. Write a paragraph describing what students can do to combat test anxiety. Choose a major or profession you have chosen or in which you are interested. Write a paragraph explaining what one skill or quality is most important for success in this major or profession. Composition Skills Revision Peer Review When you have finished writing the first draft of your paragraph, give it (o a classmate to read and review. Use the peer review checklist in Appendix 1 to respond to each other's drafts.<br> <br> Revision Checklist for the Paragraph Use these questions to help you to give suggestions to your peers and to revise your essay. 1.Is your topic sufficiently narrowed down? 2.Does your paragraph have a topic sentence? If not, is the topic sentence implied? 3.Does your paragraph have a clear, focused controlling idea? 4.Is your paragraph unified; that is, do all of the sentences support the com r (Mg idea? 5.Is your paragraph coherent; that is, are the sentences logically arranged and do they flow smoothly? Goals V Writing, f17b wri te a narr ative paragraph To organi ze I deas usin g chronol ogical development ' To mi te a topic sentence with a strong controll in g I dea&nbsp; To mani pul ate supporti ng sentences to convey an attitude&nbsp; To I ncr ease coherence thr ough adverbial clau ses of ti me and sequence&nbsp; Reading To r ead and r efl ect on wr iter s' personal experi ences and di scoveries about themselves&nbsp; Grbrnmar To r eviewffi tn)! ak of.ti me and sequence; preposit ions i n time ;; iiqirfittitKaimA Getting Started Journal Writing: Choose one of the following two questions, and write about it in your journal, 1.Think about an important, exciting, or humorous thing that happened to you or a friend. In your &nbsp;journal, tell this story. 2.What is a famous holiday or event that happens in your hometown every year? Why is this event or holiday important? What do people do during this celebration? How does the celebration make you feel? CHF Video Activity; "Messages for Princess Diana of England When Princess Diana of England died, many people wrote poems, notes, and letters to leave at her memorial sites. Why do you think people felt a need to write about Princess Diana or write messages to her family even though they didn't know the princess or her family personally? As you watch this video, make a pole of the comments made by each person featured ill the video. Then, compare their reactions. How were their responses to Diana's death the same and different? Video follow-up: Discussion Questions !. Do you remember Princess Diana's death? Did you have ttuy feelings similar to those of the people portrayed in the video? 2. Do you remember ihe passing of any other person who was important to you? What were your feelings then? .1. Looking back now on these experiences, what are your reflections on those tillK'S-' Readings: Personal Reflections Through reflecting on events in our lives, we come it understand ourselves and the world around us. Perhaps you remember a specific incident from childhood or adolescence that had a significant impact on you or taught you something about yourself. Through reflecting on events like these, we make important personal discoveries. In the readings that follow, the writers recount important events that led to personal understanding or discoveries. Are you read, determine what each '.-.Titer discovered. Reading © From "My American Journey" by Coli n Powell&nbsp; 1. In this excerpt, General Colin Powell, whose parents were born in Jamaica, tells the story, of his visit to the village where his father was born, and his first feelings upon meeting his extended family. ; We piled into jeeps provided by the Jamaican government and headed north into the interior*. We turned onto'a dirt rpad that cut through the red earth like a gash'. Handsome homes gave way to<br> <br> humble cottages. The road dwindled"- t&lt;5 a path, and we finally had to get out and walk. We had been on foot for about fifteen minutes when, pjjt of nowhere, the "custus"&nbsp;—&nbsp;the local government head&nbsp;—&nbsp;and the. police cljiief and several other-officials appeared and greeted our party. We walked behind them across gently rising fields to a crest, then started down a rutted* trail into a small valley where something quite magical happened. People seemed to emerge out of nowhere. Soon, about two hundred people surrounded us? young and old, some colorfully dressed, some in tatters,' some with shoes, some barefoot. All at once, the air was filled with music. A band appeared, youngsters in black uniforms playing "The Star-Spangled Banner." 2 "The children are from the school your father attended," the custus informed me. The musicians then shifted to calypso tunes as familiar to me as our national anthem. The crowd began clapping, reaching out to Alma and me, taking .our hands, smiling and greeting us. From a distance, a smaller group started toward us. The crowd parted to let them pass. I was choked with emotion. This was my family. No one needed to tell me. Some I had met before. As for the others, it was in their faces, in their resemblance to each other, in their resemblance to me. We had arrived at Top Hill, land of my father's birth. They embraced me and started introducing themselves, Aunt Ivie Ritchie, Cousin Muriel, Uncle Claude, Cousin Pat, in a blur of faces and family connections.<br> <br> EXERCISE 3-1 Comprehension/Discussion Questions' 1. Why did General Powell and his wife, Alma, visit Top Hill, Jamaica? 2. What happened during their trip lo Top Hill? Tell the story. 3. How far does General Powell have to travel to get to Top Hill? What details from the paragraph support your answer? 4.What different groups of people greet General Powell and his wife? How does Powell react to each group? 5.How does General Powell know that the last group of people are his family? 6.General Powell says he "was choked with emotion" when he met his extended family. Why do you think he reacted this way? How do you think you would have reacted? 7. Have you everhad an experience like this? Do you remember travelling to a place where one of your, parents lived or meeting your extended family for the first time? Tell the story. 8. Have you ever taken an important trip or met an important person? What' were your emotional reactions? Tell the story. 9. Examine the two paragraphs in this passage. Do (he paragraphs have implied or stated topic sentences? Write the topic sentence for each paragraph. Do the topic sentences you have Written have controlling ideas? What are they? "The Best Part" by M ary Kay M acki n&nbsp; In the following paragraph, Mary Kay Mackin reflects on Christmas holidays she has spent with her family and comes to a conclusion about the part she likes best. In my family, we eat Christmas dinner about four o'clock in the afternoon. That means we spend almost all day preparing the dinner and anticipating" it; it also means that the members of my family traditionally spend this time other's together. When think about it, this fellowship* is really the best part of Christmas Day for me. On Christmas morning, my parents and sisters and brothers and I have a light breakfast and open the gifts we have bought for each other. While the younger children begin playing with their new toys, my brother and I settle in the living room to talk and wait. Since we are both music lovers, we often play our new tapes or CDs or discuss the latest albums. We relish' the fact that we have nothing to do but wait for the events of the day to unfold. While we take it easy in the living room, my mother and father spend their time together cooking all the family favorites. We can almost tick off the hours by the aromas that come out of the kitchen: first the sweet, tangy smell of apple pie, then the pungent aroma of my father's special sweet potato dish, and the rich, nutty smell of my mother's asparagus casserole. Around noon, myo13e'st sister and her husband with their three children come bursting in the front door. Now, there is more talking, more opening presents, iViOfe children piaying:.with new toys on the living room floor. Pretty soon, someone suggests a walk to the<br> <br> park or a sing along around the piano. The activity in the kitchen increases as my father stirs the gravy and my mother puts the finishing touches on the festive table setting. The rest of us pitch in with the last-minute jobs of filling the water glasses and pouring the wine. Finally, the whole family sits down, my father says a brief prayer, and we begin talking again. EXERCISE 3-2 Comprehension/Discussion Questions 1.What is the best part of Christmas for Mackin? 2.What details does she give to support this idea? 3.Are the details convincing? Specific? 4.Does the paragraph have a topic sentence? If so, what is it? What is the controlling it!*a? 5.Think of a holiday that you have enjoyed again and again. What is the best part of it each time for you? Why? "The Struggle to Be an All-American Girl" by El izabeth Wong&nbsp; 1.In this essay, which first appeared in the L os Angeles Ti mes, Elizabeth Wong tells of her painful experiences growing up in the bicultural atmosphere' -of Los Angeles' Chinatown. She describes the difficulty of being Chinese on the outside but American on the inside. It's still there the Chinese school on Yale Street where my brother and... I used to go. Despite the new coat of paint and the high wire' fence, the school I knew ten years ago remains remarkably, stoically" the same. 2' " Every day at 5 p.m., instead of playing with our fourth-and fifth-grade * friends or sneaking out to the empty lot to hunt ghosts and animal bones, my brother and I had to go to Chinese school. No amount of kicking, screaming, or pleading could dissuade* my mother, who was solidly determined to have us learn the language of our heritage. 3 Forcibly, she walked us the seven long, hilly blocks from our home to school, depositing our defiant tearful faces before the stern principal. My only memory of him is that he swayed on his heels like a palm tree, and he always clasped his impatient twitching hands behind his back. I recognized him as a repressed maniacal child killer, and knew that if we ever saw his hands we'd be in big trouble. 4. We all sat in little chairs in an empty auditorium. The room smelled like Chinese medicine, an imported faraway mustiness." Like ancient mothballs or dirty closets. I hated that smell. I favored crisp new scents. Like the soft French perfume that my American teacher wore in public school. 5. There was a stage far to the right, flanked" by an American flag and the flag of the Nationalist Republic of China, which was also red, white and blue but not as pretty. 6 Although the emphasis at the school was mainly language&nbsp;—&nbsp;speaking, reading, writing&nbsp;—&nbsp;the lessons always began with an exercise in politeness. With the entrance of the teacher, the best student would tap a bell and everyone would get up, kowtow," and chant, "Sing j*n ho," the phonetic for "How are you, teacher?" 0 Being ten years old, I had better things to learn than ideographs &nbsp;copied painstakingly in lines that ran right to left from the tip of a moc but, a real ink pen that had to be held in an awkward way ir blotches were to be avoided. After all, I could do the multiplication tables, name the satellites of Mars, and write reports on Uttt* Women and Bl ack Beauty. Nancy Drew, my favorite book heroine, never spoke Chinese 7 The language was a source of embarrassment. More times than not, I had tried to disassociate" myself from the nagging loud voice that followed me wherever I wandered in the nearby American supermarket outside Chinatown. The voice belonged to my grandmother, a fragile woman in her seventies 8 who could outshout the best of the street vendors' Her humor was raunchy," her Chinese rhythm less, pattern less it was quick, it was loud, it was unbeautiful, It was not like the quiet, lilting romance of French or the gentle refinement of the American South, Chinese so untied pedestrian." Public. 9 In Chinatown; the comings and goings of hundreds of Chinese on their ' daily tasks sounded chaotic and frenzied. I did not want to be thought of as mad, as talking gibberish." When 1 spoke English; people nodded at me, smiled sweetly, said encouraging Word Sl. Even the- people 'in my culture, would cluck* and say that I'd do well in life."My, doesn't she move her lips fast," they would say,meaning that I'd be able: to keep up with the world outside Chinatown..<br> <br> 10 My brother was even rhpre fanatical than I about speaking English; He was especially hard or, my mother, criticizing her, often cruelly, for her pidgin" speech&nbsp;—&nbsp;smatterings of Chinese scattered like chop suey in her conversation. "It's not 'What it is.' Mom," he'd say in exasperation, "it's 'What is it, what is&nbsp; &nbsp;it, what is it’&nbsp;Sometimes Mom might leave out an occasional "the" or "a," or perhaps a verb of being. He would stop her in mid-sentence: "Say it again, Mom. Say it right." when he tripped over his own tongue," he'd blame it on her: "See, Mom, it's all your fault. You set a bad example." it What infuriated my mother most was when my brother cornered her on her consonants, especially 11 My father had played a cruel joke on Mom. by assigning her an American name that her tongue wouldn't allow her to say. No matter how hard she tried, "Ruth" always ended up "Luth" or "Roof" 12 After two years of writing with amoc but and reciting words with multiples of meanings, I finally was granted a cultural divorce. I was permitted to stop Chinese school. 13 I thought of myself as multicultural. I preferred tacos to egg rolls; I enjoyed Cinco de Mayo more than Chinese New Year. 14 At last, I was one of you; I wasn't one of them. 15 Sadly, I still am. EXERCISE 3-3 Comprehension/Discussion Questions 1. What did Elizabeth Wong and her brother do every day after school? 2. What was their attitude about this activity? How do you know; 3. \\'h r . •.'.-.-.ntcd them to do this? Why? 4. According to Wong, what kind of man was the school principal? 5. Wong compares the smells of the Chinese school with those of the public school. What smells docs she i eniember of each? How do these smells suggest her attitude toward each? 6. Wong compares what she learn s at each school. Wh at does she learn at Chinese school? At publi c school? I n her opini on, which i s more important? Why? 7. According to Wong what was her grandmother like? What was Wong's attitude toward her?. Why? 8. What was her brother's attitude about speaking English? How did Wong's brother treat his mother when she spoke English? How do you account for this behavior? 9. Explain the problem Wong's mother had with her American name, "Ruth." 10. Wong sees herself as multicultural. What does she mean? What examples does she give to prove this? Are these examples surprising? Why? 11. Who are the "you" and "them" in paragraph. 14? 12. Explain the significance of the last sentence. What is Wong's attitude as an adult toward Chinese school? 13.Wong and her brother resented being forced to attend Chinese school. I to you think their mother was right in making them go? Why, or why ryitt 14.Wong describes the-clash of two cultures and the conflicts that can -from it, Do you think it is possible for someone to maintain connections with his or her; original culture and at the same time become un "all-American"? What does one gain or lose in becoming completely Americanized? EXERCISE 3'4 Vocabulary Development When you read, you often do not know the meanings of all the words in the essay liven so you often do not look up words in your dictionary but try to guess at the meanings of the words from the context the words and sentences surrounding the unknown word. In this exercise you will practice guessing at the meaning of words in context. A. Following is. a paragraph from Elizabeth Wong's essay. First, underline all the words you do not know and choose five to write on the blanks below. Then read the paragraph again and guess the meaning of each word. Write in the blank what you think the word means. Finally, check with your classmates and/or the dictionary to confirm your guesses. The first one is done as an example. Forcibly, she walked us the seven long, hilly-blocks from our home to school, depositing our defiant tearful faces before the stern principal. My pnjy memory of him is that he swayed or, hi-, h^eii iik^ a palm tree, and he always clasped his impatient twitching hands behind his back. I recognized him as a repressed maniacal child killer, and knew that if we ever saw his hands we'd be in big trouble.<br> <br> 1. defiant&nbsp; 2. 3. 4. 5.<br> <br> angr y, resistant&nbsp;<br> <br> i: Now&nbsp;jtfd each, of your word* in a-sentence of your owiii"'<br> <br> Writing Present Narration There are several ways to organize sentences in paragraphs. The arrangement of sentences and details depends on the writer’s purpose. Suppose, for example, that you are asked to write about a typical morning at school. Obviously, you would not begin by telling what you do when you get home; instead, you would begin with what you do .first and end with what you do at the end of the morning. In short, you would arrange your ideas according to the fine in which they occurred. Likewise, to explain a process (how to do something), you would begin by explaining what to do first and finish by explaining what to do last. Ordering your sentences and ideas in order of time is referred to as chronological development. There are principally two types of writing that require chronological development: narration and process description. (Process analysis is discussed in Chapter 10.) Although narration usually refers to the telling of a story, the term is used here to describe the relating of an experience. That experience may be in the past (past narration) or it may be a typical experience (what people usually do) or it may be going on now (present narration). Ordering your sentences and ideas chronologically is not hard, as you know. However, it can be difficult, to make your paragraph unified&nbsp;—&nbsp;in other words, to decide what to include and what to omit and to select a controlling idea for your paragraph. Imagine that you received a letter from your cousin back home who is very curious about American customs. If you lived in New Orleans, you might decide to write to your cousin about the famous Mardi Gras celebration. Your narration might begin like this: for many, Mardi Gras day begins on St. Charles Avenue with the Rex Parade. By nine o'clock, the avenue Is lined with people dressed In" all' kinds of costumes. At around ten o'clock, the parade begins. First there is the sound of sirens. The police on motorcycles always lead the parade to clear the street. Then a band usually marches by. At this time, the people start clapping and swaying to the music. Next come the masked men on horseback. Finally, the first float arrives carrying men in costumes and masks. Immediately, everyone rushes toward the float.-They wave their hands and yell, "Throw me something, Mister" The men generally throw beads and coins at the crowd. Then the float passes, but soon another one comes and the people do the same thing over again. After about an hour, the parade passes by and the first part of Mardi Gras day ends. The writer has narrowed down trie topic to the R <br> crowd waves back. Sometimes a girl goes up and kisses one of the riders! Finally, someone usually shouts, "There it isl" It is the first float carrying men in costumes and masks. Immediately, everyone rushes toward the float. They wave their hands and yell, "Throw me something. Mister!" The men throw beads and souvenir coins to the excited crowd. Usually, they catch the coins, but sometimes one hits the ground. Then several people rush to retrieve it, pushing and shoving if necessary. Then the "oat passes, but soon another one comes and the madness continues in the same way. After about an hour, the parade passes by and the first part of Mardi Gras day ends.' By adding a topic sentence with a strong controlling idea ("delightful madness"), the writer clearly establishes his attitude about the parade. In addition, the writer has changed sonic of the sentences and added some details to make sure that the support shows the delightful madness at the Rex Parade. Internet Activity: Composition; Skills and the Internet 'rp.5eci.pictures,aiid.yjdcos of some of the many parades that take place at Mardi Gras time point your browser to www.niardigras.com or do a keyword search for "Mardi Gras." Look through this site and then choose one picture or video that you like. Write a paragraph- describing the picture or video you have chosen. EXERCISE 3-5 Reread the preceding paragraph and underline the specific changes I he writer has made, What effect do these chanu.es have on the paragraph? EXERCISE 3'6 To practice manipulating supporting sentences to convey an attitude, rewrite each of the following sentences in two ways. In the first version, assume that the controlling idea is "enjoyable." In the second version, assume that it is "awful." Study the following useful expressions. Select from this list or add other expressions and details. Topi c 'Sentence: i-'uniiki enjoys 'his*' morning routine. Useful Ex pressions:&nbsp;<br> <br> &nbsp;jumps out of bed leaps out of bed savors the flavor sips peaceful<br> <br> happily cheerfully carefully puts on selects with care sunlight<br> <br> -<br> <br> Topic Sentence: Nobuuka considers his morning routine awful. Useful Ex pressions:&nbsp;<br> <br> drags himself out of bed forces himself to get out gulps the tea down thro-..: on his cloth;;. annoying 1. He gets out of bed. Fumiki: Nobutaka:. 2. He puts on his clothes. Fumiki: Nobutaka: 3. He opens the curtains. Fumiki: Nobutaka 4. He drinks some tea. Fumiki: Nobutaka:<br> <br> wearily grumbles depressing glare of fee tun<br> <br> 5. He says "Good morning" to his neighbor. Fumiki: Nobutaka EXERCISE 3-7 Writing Assignment Using the information in Exercise 3-6, write at paragraph about either Fumiki or Nobutaka. You should add more information to support the controlling idea in your topic sentence. EXERCISE 3-8 Writing Assignment Using one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter 1, generate material about the morning or evening routine that you or a close friend follows. Then decide on a controlling idea and write a paragraph. EXERCISE 3-9 Writing Assignment Choose one of the following topics. 1. Reread the paragraph on page 45 about the Rex Parade. The actions described in that paragraph arc typical; that is, people do these things each year at the parade. People act differently at other kinds of parades. Think of a parade that is held in your country each year (such as an Independence Day parade). Make a list of the things people do before and during the parade. From that list, think of a controlling idea about your topic. Then write a paragraph nbo;;; what people uu«ily du at the parade. Be surs lltat the sentences aii support the controlling idea. 2. Reread the paragraph on page 39 about the best part of the Christmas holiday. Think of a holiday that you have celebrated many times. Brainstorm about what typically happens during that holiday. Then, decide on a controlling idea and write a paragraph. Composition Skills Coherence Adverbials of Time and Sequence The sentences in both of the paragraphs on the Mardi Gras celebration, are arranged in chronological order. Each of the paragraphs is a short narration, A." i. n.irratton,-as-noted earlier, tells a story or describes a sequence of events. It is important in narrative writing, to show the reader the time relationship between -''sentences and ideas; clarifying the time relationship helps to achieve coherence. After all, if any of the sentences could be switched around without any significant change in meaning, the paragraph is not coherent. In the revised paragraph about the Rex Parade, the following adverbial expressions of time and sequence tic the .J Sentences together logically, thus 'clarifying the time sequence. By nine o'clock ... At around ten o'clock ... First ... Next… In your paragraphs, using adverbials of lime ami sequence will give your writing coherence. Grammar Review If you want further review of grammatical structures that will help you achieve coherence and grammatical accuracy in your writing, see the Grammar Review Unit. The following sections are designed to coordinate with the narrative paragraph: Adverbials of Time and Sequence, pages 306-307 Prepositions in Time Expressions, pages 307-309 These sections give practice with these structures in the context of the narrative paragraph. EXERCISE 3-10 Think of a person you know who has a job that you are interested in, perhaps electrical engineering, nursing, or teaching. Write a sentence that tells the kind of job it is. Then<br> <br> answer the following questions. If you can not answer the questions, you could interview, the person to get the information. Example: My friend Li Ling is a photographer. 1. Does she like her job? 2. How does she get to work? 3. What time does she arrive at work? 4. What is one thing she does every day? 5.What is one thing she does not do very often? 6.What is one thing she sometimes does? 7.What is one thing she never does? 8. What does she like most about her job? 9. What does she like least? 10. At what time does she leave work?<br> <br> EXERCISE 3-11 Writing Assignment Using the information you generated in Exercise 3-10, make some notes about your friend's job. Add any information that comes to mind. From the material, find a controlling idea. Write a paragraph about what your friend generally does at work. EXERCISE 3-12 Writing Assignment Write a paragraph describing a typical morning in the life of a working person in your country, such as a doctor, farmer, businesspenon, or computer programmer. Past Narration We have been concentrating on narrative paragraphs tit.it describe a sequence of events in the present lime. Just as common, if not more so, is narration that takes place in the past. Suppose, for example, that you were asked to describe a significant Tmbment in your life. First, sum up the significance of this moment in one sentence. Then arrange your sentences logically and include only the sentences that relate to the topic. Study the following narration and sec how the sentences are arranged, if it has a controlling idea, and if it has unity and coherence. One summer day when I was sixteen, my friend Steve and I were taking a new shortcut through the woods to visit another friend who lived in the country. His house was about five miles away by the road, but we figured the shortcut would cut it to only three. After we had hiked about halfway, we came to a creek. We studied it for a moment, thinking what to do. It was *bcut 15 feet wide and, ws guessed, 6 or 8 feet deep; we had to either swim across or walk perhaps miles out of our way trying to find a bridge. Steve, a devil-may-care type, quickly took off his bob's and trousers, tied them all together and threw them across the creek, plunged in without further ado, and had soon swum to the other side&nbsp;—&nbsp;dripping wet, to be sure, but already needling me for still being on the wrong side of the creek. Not a good swimmer, I hesitated: How deep was the water? Could I dog-paddle across without sinkiftg? The longer I delayed, the more energetically Steve taunted me for' being' 'chicken." Finally I gathered my nerve, took, a deep breath, and, fully dressed, jumped into the creek. The result was predictable my boots Instantly became waterlogged and dragged me down beneath" the surface; I could barely move my legs and began floundering helplessly.-rapidly getting panicky. Fortunately for. me, Steve quickly understood the situation. As I ffailed about in the water, he leapt back into the creek and dragged me out safely on the other side, liver since that day so maciy years ago when I almost drowned, I have had a healthy fear of any body of water more than 3 feet deep. EXERCISE 3-13 On a separate sheet of paper, answer these questions about the preceding paragraph: 1.Where in the paragraph is the topic sentence located? Why do you think the author placed the topic sentence there? 2. What is the controlling idea? 3.Is the paragraph coherent? Is it unified? Explain. 4.Make an outline of this paragraph.<br> <br> EXERCISE 3-14 Writing Assignment Choose one of the following topics. 1.Think of a memorable experience you have had&nbsp;—&nbsp;it could be frightening, sobering, or amusing. Using one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter One, generate material on the topic. Then, make an outline (review pages 25-26) of the sequence of events in your experience. What is the point of your narration? Make the point your controlling idea and write a topic sentence. 2.Think of a time when you had to do something against your wishes. Generate material and make an outline of the sequence of events in your experience. You may wish to refer to Elizabeth Wong's essay, "The Struggle to Be an All-American Giii," un pages 41-42. Composition Skills Coherence Adverbial Clauses of Time Time sequence if conveyed by terms like after, fi rst, then, and until followed by noun phnucs or time expressions. Although: these expressions help to achieve coherence in chronologically developed paragraphs, a more sophisticated technique for achieving coherence involves adverbial clauses of time. Note how the author uses adverbial clauses of time in the paragraph about the scary experience: ''One summer day when [.was sixteen, my friend Steve and I were faking a ' new shortcut through the woods to visit 'another friend who lived in the country. Af ter we had hi ked about h alf way, we came to a creek. As I fl ail ed about in the wattr , he leapt back into the creek and dragged me out safely on the other side. To improve coherence in your narrative paragraphs, use adverbial clauses of. Internet Activity: Composition Skills and the Internet Biographies are the stories of people's lives. You can read the stories of thousands of people at http://www.biography.com/.&nbsp;Use the search option to find an interesting biography. Is the narration in the past tense? Is it coherent? Because these paragraphs must give a lot of information in, v.vry. little space. Word like, adverbials are often omitted. This means that the coherence of rftost of these paragraphs could be: improved. Choose a biography and improve its. coherence by adding adverbial* and adverbial clauses of time. Turn in the original paragraph with its Web address along with your rewrite. Grammar Review If you want further review of grammatical structures that will help you achieve coherence and grammatical accuracy in your writing, see the Grammar Review Unit. The following sections are designed to coordinate with the narrative paragraph: Adverbial Clauses of Time, pages 306-309 Verb Tense Review: The Simple Past, the Past Progressive and the Past Perfect, pages 362-367 In addition to practice with these grammatical structures, you will find additional writing assignments focused on the narrative paragraph. EXERCISE 3-15 Writifi J Assignment Following are some topics for your final writing assignment. Choose one that interests you and use one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter 1 to generate ideas and support Then, establish, the sequence of events in your narrative and decide on your controlling idea. Also decide if your controlling idea should appear at the beginning or at the end of your paragraph. Remember to use adverbial clauses of time for coherence. Finally, since you are writing a past narrative, decide which of the past tenses to use. With-these concerns in mind, write the paragraph. Relate an 'incident in. your life when you learned* lesson or made an important dilwovery, 2. Thfaitj of a significant" historical event that took place in your lifetime, such as the fall of the Berlin Wall, a devastating earthquake or other natural disaster, or an important political event. Write a paragraph about what you were doing on that day when you heard the news of the event.<br> <br> 1 EXERCISE 3'.16 Assignments from the Disciplines Following We some topics for your final writing assignment which are typical of college writing assignments. For-your final writing assignment, you may choose one that you have studied, or consult a textbook or the Internet to find the answer. Then, follow the directions for Exercise 3-15 to write your answer. 1. Prom Marketing&nbsp;—&nbsp;Marketers know that when a new product is introduced, it will go through a life cycle. Throughout this life cycle, the amount of the product that people buy changes, and the product's life end when it is no longer needed. Choose a product and write a narrative paragraph that chronologically describes each stage of this product's life. 2. From Biology&nbsp;—&nbsp;As living things live, they move through different stages that start with conception and end with death. Choose one of the following organisms and write a paragraph which chronologically outlines the stages of the organism's life cycle: (a) moss, (b) a butterfly, (c) a chicken, (d) a human being. Composition Skills Revision Peer Review When you have finished, writing the first draft of your paragraph, give it to a classmate to read and review. Use the peer review checklist in Appendix i tn respond to each other's drafts. Revision Check list for the Narrative Paragraph Use these questions to help you to give suggestions to your peers and to revise your essay. 1. A narrative paragraph relates a story or incident. Does your paragraph tell a story? 2. A narrative paragraph presents the sequence of events in a story in chronological order. Are your ideas and sentences arranged 'in chronological order? 3. Does your paragraph have a clear topic sentence or an implied topic sentence? 4. Does your paragraph have a clear, focused controlling idea? 5. Is your paragraph unified; that is do all of your sentences support the controlling Chapter 4 The descriptive paragraph Theme People and Pl aces Goals Writing To organi ze and wr ite paragr aphs descri bin g places and people&nbsp; To or gani ze ideas usin g spatial organi zation&nbsp; To u se modif ier s to make details vivi d and specif ic&nbsp; To i ncr ease coherence by usin g adverbial s of p/are and adjecti ve clauses&nbsp; Reading&nbsp; To read and discuss descr ipti ons of people and places&nbsp; To compr ehend the details of a descri pti on, i ncl udi ng th e sounds, smi lls, sights, and feelings associated wit h a penon or place&nbsp; Grammar&nbsp; To review adver bs of place, adjecti ves, parti ciples as adjecti ves, passive vs.y acti ve voice, adjecti ve clauses&nbsp;<br> <br> Getting Started Journal Writing: Choose one of the following two questions, and write about it in your journal.<br> <br> What people have had a great influence on your life? Think of one of these people and write about rumor her in your 'journal. How did he or she influence you? What, characteristics does this, person have that you admire? 2. Where do you usually study? Is this place clean or messy? Quiet or noisy? Crowded or private? Write a description of this place, and tell why you prefer to study there. Vltteo Activity: ''Yosemite National Park" Yosemite National Park is one of the most frequently visited national parks in the United States. People enjoy visiting it to sec its beautiful waterfalls, large trees, iirid beautiful natural formations However, people who visit Yosemite will find it difficult to be alone with nature because there are so many other people visiting the park with them. As you watch the video, make a list of adjectives, adverbs, and other descriptive phrases which describe (1) the nature in Yosemite, and (2) the people in Yosemite. :<br> <br> Video ftiMow-up: i reewriting Choose two locations near your home or yovir school. One should be a place where you can be alone or where you can be near nature. The other should be a crowded place with many people. Sit in each place for about 15 minutes and write about what you see. Share your writing 'with your classmates or your teacher. Readings: Important People, Important Places Our lives are filled with places, people, and events. We remember certain important places from our childhood and from our current lives&nbsp;—&nbsp;perhaps a particular room or outdoor scene. Often when we think of that place, we not only see it in detail but we also smell the smells and hear the sounds associated with it. We remember what important event happened there. So too, with people. Certain people are important in our lives&nbsp;—&nbsp;our parents, family members, teachers, others&nbsp;—&nbsp;and again, when we think of a particular person, we see the details and hear the sounds of that individual and remember, even with just a feeling, his or her impact on our lives. In the following two readings, lade Snow Wong remembers a particular person, and Tom Huth describes a memorable place. As you read the selections, try to answer this question: What important characteristics do the writers remember about the people and places they are describing? "Uncle Kwok'' by Jade Snow Wong&nbsp; In this reading selection from F if th Chin ese Daughter, the author's autobiography about growing up in San Francisco's Chinatown, Jade Snow Wong prerjerite' a memorabjfrpo appearance and, his actions from, the time he inters the Wong factory Cwhkh' also ervesas. Ther family'shome) until he gets settled at his job.: As ybu read this selection,- try-to -discover Wong's attitude toward Uncle Kwok. 1 Among the workers in Daddy's factory, Uncle Kwok was one of the strangest--a large-framed, awkward, unshaven man whose worn clothes hung orffifm as if they did not belong to him. Each afternoon around three-thirty, as some of the workers were about to go home to prepare their early dinners. Uncle Kwok slowly and deliberately ambled" in through the Wong front door, dragging his feet heavily, and gripping in one hand the small black satchel* from which he was never separated. 2. Going to his own place at the sewing machine, he took off his battered" hat and ragged coat, hung both up carefully, and then sat down. At first Jade Snow was rather afraid of this extraordinary person, and unseen, watched his actions from a safe distance. After Uncle Kwok was settled in his chair, he took off his black, slipper like shoes. Then, taking a piece of stout cardboard from a miscellaneous" pile which he kept in a box near his sewing machine, he traced the outline of his shoes on the cardboard. Having closely examined the blades of his scissors and tested their sharpness, he would cut out a pair of cardboard soles, squinting" critically through his inaccurate glasses. Next he removed frdm both shoes the cardboard soles he had made the day before and inserted the new-pair. Satisfied with his inspection of his renewed footwear, he got up; went to the waste can some seventyfive feet away, disposed of the old soles, and returned to his machine. He had not yet said a word to anyone.<br> <br> 3. Daily this process was repeated without deviation." ' The next thing Uncle Kwok always did was to put on his own special apron, homemade from double thicknesses of heavy burlap" and fastened at the waist by strong' denim ties. This long apron covered his jjjin, patched trousers and protected him from dirt and draft. After a half hour had been consumed by these chores. Uncle Kwok was ready to wash his hands. He sauntered" into the Wong kitchen; stationed himself at the one sink which served both family and factory and with characteristic meticulousness," now proceeded to clean his hands and fingernails. 5 It was Mama's custom to begin cooking the evening meal at this hour so that the children could have their dinner before they went to the Chinese school; but every day she had to delay her preparations at the sink until slow-moving Uncle Kwok's last clean fingernail passed his fastidious" inspection. One day, however, the inconvenience tried her patience to its final limit. 6 Trying to sound pleasantly persuasive," she said, '"Uncle Kwok, please don't be so slow and awkward. Why don't you wash y purhahds at a different time, or else wash them faster?" 7 Uncle Kwok loudly protested-the injustice of her: comment, "Mama; I am not awkward.-The only awkward thing about my life; is that it has not yet prospered!" And he strode off, too hurt even to dry his hands finger by finger, as was his custom EXERCISE 4'1 Comprehension/Discussion Questions 1. What is the main point that Wong makes about Uncle Kwok? In which sentence is this point clearly established? 2. What are some of the physical details that Wong gives lo describe Uncle Kwok? 3. How does Uncle Kwok dress? 4. How does he move? Find five words that describe the way he moves. 5. Describe Uncle Kwok's daily routine. What does lie do first? Next? Next? 6.What is Wong's mother's attitude toward Uncle Kwok? 7.What words would you use to describe Wong's attitude toward her uncle? 8.What docs Uncle Kwok's statement in paragraph 7 explain about his behavior? Does it help us to understand Uncle Kwok better? If so, how? 9.In the first paragraph, Wong describes Uncle Kwok as "strange." What makes him strange to her? What makes any person strange? EXERCISE W Vocabulary Development In describing Uncle Kwok, Wong uses adverbs of manner to tell about his actions. Adverbs of manner usually end in -ly and tell how something, is done. Note these examples from the first paragraph of the essay. Uncle Kwok slowly and deliberately ambled in through the Wong front door. Shwiy and deliberately tell how Uncle Kwok ambled or walked. In describing his 'talk, these words also help to indicate his character. Ts, they help us to understand Uncle Kwok better. 1. In the following phrases and sentences from the Wong reading, underline the adverbs of manner. Then tell what aspects of Uncle Kwok they help to convey. a. dragging his feet heavily (par. 1) b. he took off his battered hat and ragged coat, hung both up carefully (par. c. Having closely examined the blades of his to and tested their sharpness d. he would cut out a pair of cardboard soles, squinting nautically through his inaccurate glasses (par. 2) 2. The following adjectives all Kelp to describe Uncle Kwok. Make them into adverbs of manner by adding. Write the adverb in the blank provided. The first one is done for you a AwslowJy b. awkward c. meticulous d. fastidious Now use each of the preceding adverbs in n sentence to describe a particular action of Uncle Kwok. Uncl e Kwok i mmnreii slowly to r/n? sink to wash h is haml s.<br> <br> b. c. d.<br> <br> Wong relates some of Uncle Kwok's actions without a.-descriptive adverb. If she had used adverbs with the following actions, what words do you think she might have used? From your knowledge of Uncle Kwok's character, add an appropriate adverb to each of the following actions. Try to use a variety of adverbs. The first, one is done for you. a. t'&amp;WY&nbsp; &nbsp;gripping in one hand the small black satchel (par. 1) b. Going ….. to his own place at the sewing machine (par. 2) c. he….. a ….. traced the outline of his shoes on the card board (par. 2) d. he….. put on his own special apron (par. 4) e. He sauntered ….. into the Wong kitchen (par. 4) f. he proceeded ….. to clean his hands and fingernails (par. 4) From "Beyond the Sun" by Tom H uth&nbsp; In this excerpt from an article which appeared in Traveler magazine, Tom Huth describes Finnish.Lapland as he saw it on a cross-country skiing trip one winter. In order to describe the beautiful snow-cowered land he saw, Huth uses many similes and metaphors. For more information about similes and metaphors, see Exercise 4-4 after the reading.<br> <br> I It's colder now. There's a rosy blush of color behind the clouds massed low in the southern sky, near where the sun might be. The trail cut'a swath" fifteen feet wide through a deep evergreen forest, and I fall into the easy meditative rhythm of flatland skiing: kick-slide, kick-slide, kick-slide, it warms me up right away. 3 When the lodge is well behind me, with only the forest ahead, I at last stop and look around. What kind of magic is this? A minimalist world. Nothing but spruce trees mounded' with snow, a vast and enclosing mosaic' etched" solely in grays and whites. Candle spruce, the trees are called&nbsp;—&nbsp;tall and slender, their boughs" held close to their trunks.for protection against tht». winter's weight, lowered in supplication." Without a winter sun, without much wind, the snow that falls here doesn't melt or blow away, as it does back in Colorado, where I usually ski: Instead, it stays on the trees, bending the smaller ones over like so many nuns with their heads bowed in prayer. On the tops of the trees the snow clumps" into knobs that look like bobbing* human heads, like drunks falling asleep at a bar, like legions of friendly ghosts nodding off" to dreamland. And the smallest trees of all are but stubby" white thumbs lost entirely beneath the snow. Without direct sunlight, there are no shadows here, no lines, no sharp distinctions. The daylight lies as a graying caress upon the soft, undisturbed patterns of free-fallen snow. It's a scene so easy on the eyes, so at peace "with itself, that the skier opens wide to'take it all in. Winter's wonderland discovered: the Forest White. EXERCISE 4-3 Comprehension/Discussion Questions 1.What is the main idea that Huth wishes to convey about this place? 2. How would you describe the atmosphere of the part of Lapland that Huth is siding through? Make a list of three adjectives which describe this atmosphere. 3. Explain what Huth means by, "I fall into the easy, meditative rhythm of flatland skiing." (par. 1); 4. What does the writer mean when he says, "What kind of magic is this? A minimalist world." (par. 2)? What details does ho give to support this idea? 5. What does the writer mean when he says, "It's a scene so easy on the eyes,iJ0.»f peace with itself, that the skier opens wide to take it all in."?<br> <br> .Huth;.fjejjcrib.es,the,snqvv-coVered trees in Fijtnish Lapland in.detail.'.Ih.ypur ; ^pyvii'.words,describe ■vyhatygu'think fhese.tiees&nbsp;must look like... ' . .<br> <br> 7. The author contrasts this place with Colorado, where he usually skis. How is this place different? 8.What do you think are the most memorable points of this landscape for the writer? Are these same points the most memorable for you as a reader? 9.Because the sun is never actually visible while Huth is skiing, he is very careful to explain the effect that this indirect light has on the landscape, find five words or phrases in the article which describe the light in this place. 10. How does Huth feel about this place? How do you feel about this place after reading this description of it? EXERCISE 4-4 Vocabulary Development When writing ;i description, writers must use words to describe what they see, smell, hear, taste, and feel. The description is successful if it is so vivid that it recreates these sensations for the reader. One way to recreate these sensations with words is to use similes and metaphors to compare the thing being described with something familiar to the reader. The expression like + iwttti ph rase is called a simile and is a valuable tool for descriptive writing. This expression makes a comparison between things that do not otherwise seem similar. Example: The tree wears the snow like a white fur coat. Metaphor is a comparison that uses only the linking verb "to be," but does not use the words li ke or as. Example: The snow on the tree is a white fur coat that protects it from the winter. Similes and metaphors arc often used in poetry; however, you can use them in your writing, especially when you do not know a vocabulary word or when you just want to add an extra touch. For example imagen describing someone's eyes that were green with specks of brown in them&nbsp;—&nbsp;a deep hazel. If that person had just been crying, the description could be, "Her eyes look like the forest after a rainstorm&nbsp;—&nbsp;dark green and brown and moist." Obviously, original comparisons can be overdone, but it is a good idea to try to use fresh, interesting comparisons once in a while. In paragraph two, Tom Huth uses several similes and One metaphor to describe the trees he sees as he skis in Lapland. He also uses one simile in paragraph three to describe the effect of the light on the snow. Find these similes and the metaphor and write them on the lines below. Which ones paint the most vivid picture for you?<br> <br> EXERCISE 4'5 Complete each of the following sentences with a noun phrase. Try to use a noun phrase that is creative. 1.Hill's outfit is quite colorful. In it he looks like 2.What beautiful half you have! Your hair looks like 3. It's mining wry hard. It sounds like 4.lust look al these "dishpan" hands. They look like 5. What an ugly car! It looks like ´ EXERCISE 4-6 Writing Assignment Listen to the radio, television, recordings, or other people for interesting similes. Write down at least five. Writing Narrative paragraphs describe a sequence of events or tell a story; in other words, they describe an experience. The logical arrangement of ideas and sentences in a narrative paragraph is chronological&nbsp;—&nbsp;according to time order. But if you were asked to describe how something looks&nbsp;—&nbsp;a place, a thing, or a person, obviously time order tvrttiW :--! be logical. When you are describing the wav something looks&nbsp;—&nbsp;its physical appearance&nbsp;—&nbsp;&nbsp;it is not time but space that is important. Therefore, you should arrange your sentences and details according to where the objects being described are located. This type of organization is called spatial organi zation. In a descriptive paragraph, you must make the location of the objects being described very clear. Description of a Place In describing a room, what should you describe first! The walls? The floor? Unlike the chronologically developed paragraph, there is no set pattern for arranging sentences in a descriptive paragraph, it is not necessary to begin with one area and then proceed to another area. Nevertheless,<br> <br> the sentences should not be randomly arranged. The description, must be organized so that the reader can vividly imagine the scene being described. Imagine that you are describing a scene for an artist to paint. Would you have the artist paint the ceiling white and the bed blue and then go back and put posters on the walls before painting the Walls? Of course not! Those directions might irritate the artist; The same applies to describing for the reader, for you are the describer with words, and your reader is the painter who mentally recreates what you are describing in the paragraph. The arrangement of the details in a descriptive paragraph depends on the subject. The selection and the description of details depend, on the describer's purpose. Suppose that your cousin wrote and asked you to describe your room. Remember that your cousin is very interested in what you think about your life in the United States. You might write your description like this: My dormitory room is on the second floor of Bienville Hall. It is a small rectangular room with a white ceiling and green walls. As you enter the room; straight ahead you will see two large windows with gold curtains. My bed which is covered with a red and gold bedspread, is under the windows. On your left, against the wall, there is a large bookcase filled with books. Close to the door, a desk and chair sit next to the bookcase, with a small woven wastepaper basket underneath the desk: There are several posters on this wall. The one that is over the bookcase shows an interesting scene from our country. The one that is over the desk is of my favorite singer. To your right, built into the wall opposite the bookcase and desk, is a closet with sliding doors. Behind you on your right and somewhat behind the door, is a dresser with a mirror over it. Examine this description. Is the location of the objects in the room clear? Are the details arranged logically? The answer to both of these questions is yes. The objects are clearly arranged ami the description .is easy tu fv?liuWVlTlic paragraph is both unified and coherent. But is the controlling idea about the room clear? What impression is conveyed about the room? Would your cousin know if you liked the room or not? Probably not. To make the paragraph more interesting, you can add a controlling idea that states an attitude or impression about the place being described. After all, your cousin does want to know how you feel ' about your room. This paragraph could be revised to include a strong controlling idea. Read the following revised version and .locate the topic sentence with the''-controlling idea: My dormitory room, on the second floor of Bienville Hall, is small and crowded. The dark green walls and dirty white ceiling make the room seem dark, and thus even smaller than it is. As you walk into the room, you are stopped short by my 'bed, which fills half of the room. The two large windows over the bed are hidden by heavy dark gold drapes. Against the wall on your left, pushed into a corner behind the head of the bed. is a large bookcase that is crammed with papers, books, and knickknacks. Wedged in between the bookcase and the wall opposite the bed is a small gray metal desk. It has a brown wooden chair that seems to fill the left end of the room. Stuffed under the desk is a woven waste paper basket overflowing with paper and debris. The wall above the bookcase and desk is completely taken up with two small posters. On the right-hand side of the room is a narrow closet with clothes, shoes, hats, tennis racquets, and boxes bulging out of its sliding doors. Every time I walk out of the door, I think/"Now I know what it is like to live in a closet." This revised version is quite different from the original uii(, even though both versions describe the same rooivu The addition of a topic sentence with a strong controlling idea lias dictated not only what is included, but also how the objects in the room are described. A strong controlling idea gives the paragraph focus. Reread the preceding paragraph and underline the changes from the earlier version. These changes reinforce the controlling idea and give a clear idea of what you think about your little room. EXERCISE 4-7 Writing Assignment Rewrite the preceding paragraph using "comfortable" as the controlling idea in the topic sentence. Change the description to show that the room is comfortable. Feel free to add or delete details as necessary.<br> <br> EXERCISE 4-8" Writing Assignment Think of a room in your dormitory, apartment, or house. Make a list of the objects in the room. Then think about how you cuuiu describe them. What wiii you use for a controlling idea? Plan your paragraph and then write it. on the second floor straight ahead underthe windows on your left over the table on the righthand side against the wall above the bookcase next to the toilet in the corner along the back of the house underneath the desk opposite the bed from these heights Here are some other expressions that clarify space relationships: Behi nd the chair - is a guitar. • On top, of the refr igerator is a plant. The desk is adjacent to the bookcase. EXERCISE 4-10' Study the following paragraph, and underline the adverbs of place. How do they help the paragraph achieve coherence?'' So this was to be our home for the summer. My husband and I had rented a cabin on a ranch in Colorado and here we were. As we opened the front door of Spruce Tree Lodge, my first impression was of a dim, cool place inviting us to relax. With some lights on. I was relieved to noticeton the wall in front of me the traditional white cabinets, small electric stove, and humming refrigerator that marked a functional kitchen. At least we weren't going to be doing all our cooking over a campfire! I noticed against the paneled wall to my left a small sofa made of tan naugahyde." Even though it was not chic," it spoke of years of comfort and service. 8eside it. on a table in the corner, perched a funky old lamp made from a piece of unfinished pine. Both table and lamp were straight out of 5alvation Army, but the mood they created was just right -for long afternoons of reading novels. On the wall to my right were two big windows with a view of the trees and mountains outside. How gioriousl We could sit on the sofa and drink in the timelessness of the mountains while the fir and spruce trees moved in the gentle lull'' of the wind. In the middle of the room, straight ahead, stood a sturdy oak table with heavy, massive legs and a smooth, worn top. It would serve as desk, table, and catchall. My husband was already trying out the padded chairs, made of dark brown naugahyde, that were pulled up around the table ready for use. We smiled. Yes, the cabin would do very nicely. Using adverbs of place when you write descriptive paragraphs will give your writing coherence, k&nbsp; Modification: Specific Details The details in, a descriptive-paragraph should not only be logically arranged but also vivid. As a painter witiv -.voids, you want to give the reader as precise a picture as possible; otherwise, the reader will have only a vague sense of what you are describing. To make the- details more vivid, you need to modify them. {Modify means to restrict or narrow down the meaning.) Nouns can be modified in three ways: by adding adjectives, by adding adjective and prepositional phrases, and by adding clauses. Each time a modifier is added to a noun, the class to which it belongs is restricted. For example, consider the word book. The word-boot describes a rather large class. A book can be large, small, green, old, or new; it can be a text book or a novel. The "Word book, therefore,-docs not conjure up a precise image in the reader's mind. If the adjective red is added, then thei class of books is restricted to those that are no other color but red; if paperback is added, the<br> <br> class of books is further restricted to those that are red paperback books. The class can be restricted even-more.by adding an adjective clause and a prepositional phrase: a red paperback, book that h as a torn page in t he middle. Now the reader has a clear image of the book. : 'Always strive to make details specific. Vague descriptions do not allow the reader to really see the object. Specific details make your writing clearer and more interesting. Grammar Review If you want further review of grammatical structures that will help you achieve, coherence and grammatical accuracy in your writing, see the Grammar Review Unit. The following sections are designed to coordinate with the descriptive paragraph. Adverbs of Place, pages 305-306 Adjectives, pages 300-30'l Participles as adjectives, pages 301-303 The Passive Voice vs. the Active Voice, pages 372-373 EXERCISE 4'11 Choose one of the following writing assignments. 1. Write a paragraph describing your favorite place, either indoors or outdoors. Since you arc writing &nbsp;just one paragraph, be sure to narrow down the area you are going to writ e about. For example, if this place is a park, choose just one small area of the park. 2. Using the reading "Beyond the Sun" as an example, write a description of a place that you have visited. Be sure to narrow down the area that you describe and begin with a controlling idea. Try to use a few similes or metaphors to make your description richer and more interesting. Description of a Person In college writing, occasionally it will be necessary to describe an animate subject, such as a person, animal, or insect. For example, in a biology class, it might be necessary to describe the Cro-Magnon human or perhaps even a certain species of butterfly. In a sociology class, it might be necessary to describe a typical middle-class person. How' would you describe a person? Depending on the subject or assignment, you could describe the person's physical appearance, behavior, or both. At this point, the discussion will be restricted to physical appearance, since the principle of Organization is spatial, for the most part. 'You can describe a person's appearance in many ways. You can tell about the person's' style of clothing manner of walking, color and. style of hair, facial, appearance,-body shape; and expression, You can also, describe the person's way of talking. Just what you select to describe depends on your topic and purpose. For example, how would you begin to describe your girlfriend to your cousin? Her hair? Her eyes? Her voice? Remember, you are the painter with words, so you want your description to be vivid, coherent&nbsp;—&nbsp;logically arranged so that your cousin can envision the face of your girlfriend. Look at the following description and see if you can gel a good image of what Marie looks like. Marie has long black hair that falls down to her shoulders and surrounds her diamond-shaped face, which is usually suntanned. She has dark brown eyebrows over her blue eyes, which are rather large. Her" nose is straight, and on the left side of the bottom of her nose, by her nostril, is a small mole. She has a small mouth, with lips that are usually covered with light pink lipstick. Her teeth are straight and white. Is this paragraph coherent? Do you gel a good picture of Marie in your mind's eye? Yes, the paragraph is coherent and the picture is clear&nbsp;—&nbsp;as far iis it goes. But is the young lady attractive or plain? Does she have a regal appearance, or does she look rather ordinary? It is difficult to tell what the author's attitude is about the girlfriend's appearance; there is no real controlling idea here. In addition, the picture the author has painted with words is rather vague. Is Marie's hair curly or straight? Is her complexion smooth or blemished? Is her nose long? Are her lips thin or full? Are her teeth large or are they in proportion? Does she have an overbite? Are her eyebrows arched, or are they thick and straight? There are a lot of descriptive details the author has not included; 3S a result, his picture is not very vivid. Let us see how this description can be improved: Marie is as beautiful as any Hollywood star. Her thick, wavy Irjp.g black, hair gracefully falls down to her shoulders and surrounds her exquisite diamond-shaped face. A golden suntan usually highlights<br> <br> her smooth, clear complexion. Her slightly arched chestnut brown eyebrows draw attention to her deep blue eyes, which remind me of a lake on a stormy day. Her eyes are large, but not too large, with thick eyelashes. Her nose is straight and neither too long nor too short. A small black mole on the left side of her mouth adds to her beauty. And her mouth! It is a small mouth that looks delicate and feminine. Her lips are rather thin, but not too thin; her light pink lipstick adds another touch of beauty. When she smiles, which is often, her well-formed and even, white teeth brighten up her whole face. There is nothing but extraordinary beauty in the face of Marie. Now can you tell what the attitude is about the girlfriend's appearance? Yes, indeed! In this version, we get a vivid image of Marie through the eyes of her friend. The paragraph has a strong controlling idea&nbsp;—&nbsp;b eautiful&nbsp; &nbsp;—&nbsp;and has much more specific descriptive detail than the first version. EXERCISE 4-12 Writing Assignment hi the preceding: paragraph, underline the changes the author has made. Do these changes support the controlling idea? Then outline the paragraph on a separate -sheet of paper. EXERCISE 4-13 Writing Assignment Using the same descriptive detail as the original paragraph about Marie, write a paragraph that describes Marie as plain. Make any changes that you feel necessary. When describing a person, you are not obliged to describe every single detail about the person's appearance. Sometimes it is belter to locus on one or two outstanding features that convey something about the person's character. Read the following description of a young boy. What is the general impression you get about him from this description? Wallace The two most impressive things about him were his mouth and the pockets of his jacket. By looking at his mouth, one could tell whether he was plotting" evil or had recently accomplished it. If he was bent upon malevolence, his lips were all puckered up," like those of a billiard player about to make a difficult shot. After the deed was done, the pucker was replaced by a delicate, unearthly smile. How a teacher who knew anything about boys could miss the fact that both expressions we<e 4="" masks="" of="" satan="" i'm="" sure="" i="" don't="" know:="" wallace's="" pockets="" were="" less="" interesting="" than="" his="" mouth,="" perhaps,="" but="" more="" spectacular="" in="" a="" way.="" the="" side="" his-jacket="" bulged="" out="" over="" pudgy*="" haunches'="" like="" burro="" hampers.="" they="" filled-with="" tools="" screwdrivers,="" pliers,="" files,="" wrenches,="" wire="" cutters,="" nail="" sets,="" and="" know="" what="" else.="" addition="" to="" all="" this,="" one="" pocket="" always="" contained="" rolled-up="" copy="" popul="" ar="" m="" echani="" cs,="" while="" from="" top="" breast="" contained,="" besides="" large="" collection="" fountain="" pens="" mechanical="" pencils,="" picket="" fence="" drill="" bits,="" gimlets,="" kitchen="" knives,="" other="" pointed="" instruments.="" when="" he="" walked,="" clinked="" jangled="" pealed="" richard="" rovere,="" "wallace,"="" th="" e="" new="" yorker,="" feb.="" 19s0="" exercise="" 4'14="" on="" separate="" sheet="" paper,="" answer="" following="" questions="" boat="" preceding="" paragraph.="" 1.="" is="" general="" impression="" you="" get="" about="" wallace?="" 2.="" topic="" sentence?="" controlling="" idea="" stated="" or="" implied?="" 3.="" look="" up="" words="" dictionary="" these="" questions:="" a.="" pucker ="" — when="" do="" people="" pucker="" their="" lips?="" \="" b.="" unearthly ="" — what="" does="" "unearthly"="" smile="" suggest="" that="" has="" done?="" c.="" bulge ="" — where="" often="" find="" bulges?="" d.="" pwlgy ="" — does="" this="" word="" an="" ugly="" image="" n="" cute="" image?="" e.="" hmunhes ="" are="" haunches="" located?="" f.="" pick="" et="" fence ="" — draw="" fence.="" g.="" clinj="" c,="" j'="" u'="" h="" '="" penl ="" — name="" at="" least="" thing="" for="" each="" makes="" same="" sound.=""> <br> In addition to using colorful verbs, nouns, and adjectives, the author of "Wallace" makes his description even more vivid by using similes lo convey what Wallace looks like: hampers.' ". . . his lips were all puckered up, like those of a billiard player." 'The side pockets of his jacket' bulged out over his pudgy haunches like burro EXERCISE 4-15 Writing Assignment Choose one of the following topics and write a paragraph of description. Plan the paragraph carefully. Be- sure you have a controlling idea that is supported with vivid, descriptive language. Try to us&amp; a\ comparison with like. 1. Review 'the model paragraph that describes Marie on pages 66-69. Write a description of the most beautiful or the most unattractive person you know. 2. Review the model paragraph about Wallace on pages 69-70. Write a description of a person that focuses on only one or two features. Here are some useful vocabulary words and expressions for this exercise. FACIAL EXPRESSION Scowl Frown Smirk Worried ained blank. Vivacious Delicate Livel Peaceful "placid" FACIAL SHAPES round broad narrow heart-sha ed moon-sha ed an ular oval Hat<br> <br> EYES beady smiling snapping flashing empty staring hard sad bulging<br> <br> VOICE boomin ras in s ueak<br> <br> harsh rowlin dee melodious Mouth fullIhinsol sensous EYEBROWS thick arched neatl lucked uneven<br> <br> OTHER EXPRESSIONS crow's-feet knitted brow protruding forehead bony lace Composition Skills Coherence Adjective Clauses Cb*j&gt;icVv cmp!ia»i/.e's two ways of improving coherence in chronologically developed paragraphs: using time sequence markers, such as first and after that, and using adverbial clauses of time. In this chapter, the emphasis has been on achieving coherence in spatially organized descriptive paragraphs by using adverbial phrases of place. Another technique for improving coherence is the use of the adjective clause. An adjecti ve clause (sometimes called a r elative clau se) modifies a noun and, like an adverbial clause, is a dependent clause that cannot stand alone as a sentence; it must be connected to an independent clause. But unlike adverbial clauses, which can be placed either at the beginning or at the end of a sentence, an adjective clause can be placed onl y after the noun i t modif ies; it can never be placed at the beginning of a sentence. '"' ' 'TKftjtjbordiha.tors' that introduce adjective clauses include who, whom, whose, ' thtiti tndiW/iic/|. Less 'common. Adjective clause subordinators 316:when/ wh ere, and why,' O^Mrve' the use of adjective clauses in some of the passages you have read thus far It’ll a small mouth that l ooks delicate and f emi ni ne. From these heights, too, it is easy to see the variety of shrubs and sweet Jjwelling flowers, thaf I me the two lon g sides of our rectangul ar yar d, '&nbsp; As you walk into the room, you are stopped shortly my bed, which fi ll s lu tl the room. You have learned (hat a coherent paragraph is one that has logically arranged sentences and ideas; in addition, in order for a paragraph to be coherent, the sentences should flow smoothly. Smoothly is the key word here. If the sentences in a paragraph are mostly short and if the sentences contain a lot of repeated words, ihc paragraph is choppy. To illustrate, look at this description of a famous character in fiction: One of the ugliest creatures in literature is the monster in the novel F rankenstein , Th e M oder n Prometheus. The novel was written by Mary Shelley in the nineteenth century. The monster was created by Victor Frankenstein when he-was a student at a university. The monster has flowing black hair. The hair is lustrous." The monster has pearly white teeth. These fine features form a horrid contrast with his other features. He has yellow skin. The skin barely covers his facial muscles. His<br> <br> complexion is shriveled.' The monster has hideous," watery, almost colorless eyes. The eyes seem to be almost the same color as the sockets. They are set in the sockets. Even uglier, perhaps, are his lips. His lips are straight and black. Does the paragraph have a controlling idea? Yes, the controlling idea is that the monster is one of the ugliest creatures in literature. Is the paragraph unified? Yes, it describes the monster as ugly. Are the sentences and ideas logically arranged? Yes, the paragraph provides an organized description of the monster's face. But do the sentences flow smoothly? No. The paragraph has too many short sentences and too many repeated words and phrases. Adjective clauses can improve this paragraph: One of the ugliest creatures in literature is the monster in the novel F rankenstein T he M odern Prometheus, which was written by Mary Shelley in the nineteenth century. The monster, which was created by Victor Frankenstein when he was a student at a university, has flowing lustrous black hair. The monster has pearly white teeth. These fine features form a horrid contrast with his other features. He has yellow' -skin that barely covers his facial I muscles. His complexion is shriyelled. He has hideous, watery, almost colorless eyes which seem to be almost the same color as the sockets that they are set in. Even uglier, perhaps, are his lips, which are straight and black. By combining a few sentences using adjective clauses, some of the repeated words have been eliminated and the sentences flow more smoothly. More revisions of the paragraph can be done to make it flow even more smoothly, of course, but it is evident here that the use of adjective clauses helps achieve coherence. EXERCISE 4-16 Underline nil the changes in the preceding revised version. Do the changes improve the coherence of the passage? Grammar Review If you want further review of grammatical structures that will help you achieve coherence and grammatical acctiracy in your writing, see the Grammar Review Unit. The section on Adjective Clauses, pages 322-327 is designed to coordinate with the descriptive paragraph. EXERCISE 4-17 Writing Assignment Following are some topics for your final writing assignment. Choose one that interests you, and use one of the prewriting techniques you learned in Chapter 1 to generate ideas and support. Then, decide on a controlling idea and choose the details that will support it. Finally, write the paragraph. 1.Think of a strange-looking creature from a movie or photograph. Write a paragraph describing its face or another part of it, such as its hands. 2.Assume you have a pen pa! in another country. Write a paragraph to your pen pal describing your physical appearance. You might want to describe your face, or you may prefer to describe one or two of your outstanding features. EX ERCI SE 4-18 Assignm ents fr om the Di scipli nes F oll owing are some topics f or your f in al wr it in g assignment whi ch are typical of coll ege wr iting assignments. F or your f in al wr iti ng assignment, you may choose one that you have studi ed or consult atextbook or th e I nternet to fi nd the answer . Then, foll ow the dir ections for Exer cise 4~17 to wr ite your answer. 1. Fr om M anagement&nbsp; &nbsp;—&nbsp;One of th e most i mportant tasks of a manager i s to l ead the company in the ri ght dir ection , but not everyone finds it easy to be a leader. Accordin g to cur r ent management theory, what ar e the tr aits of an eff ective leader? 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